FAWM: "5 Points "

5 Points

1 day ago by @carleybaer · @stephenwordsmith

5 Points

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Liner Notes

#fuc #acoustic-one-take

Especially on the first day of FAWM, it's hard to ignore the muse when you start reading a lyric and are instantly humming a tune. I had a lot of fun with this one, thank you again @stephenwordsmith for letting me take a crack at it.

Lyrics

The starfish Has little Conception Of politics

Despite How well suited It is To the role

With no brain Or a spine And a mouth In the middle

Too close In its use To another such hole

The starfish has given No thought To symbology

Wearing Each point Of the five Without shame

And reading no more In the lines On the surface

On who You might kill Or be killed In a name

The starfish Is 'armless When life Is abysmal

Problems Run deep And the outlook Is dim

It's all In their nature To grow from their errors

If things Go awry When they're out On a limb

For words can turn you inside-out And hold the world to fault When each and every syllable Drips full of bitter salt

Surrounded By suckers All breathless And flailing

Threats From all sides To their classes Diverse

The starfish Has little Conception Of politics

Life Is too short And the other way's worse

Comments

@florian 14h

My son and me had a lot of fun with this during dinner. Stephen's clever lyrics, presented beautifully by Carley's voice and ukulele - a fantastic match!

@gwynjones 14h

Jeez! This is a masterpiece of erudition and rendition...every word and note a total joy!

@bangstick 21h

These lyrics are unbelievably clever. Shel Silverstein would be proud. I feel the line about words holding us to a fault. Beautiful tune!

@helenseviltwinMod 1d

Lovely! This has a real timeless quality to it. If I'd just heard it somewhere else, I wouldn't have been able to say whether it was written in the 50s or yesterday. As it's fawm, I know the answer.

@williamjames 1d

Great music for great lyrics. The waltz time really works here, giving this an eerie, even unstable feeling.

@sapient 1d

There is such a late 60s/early 70s vibe to this. I swear my mother had an album with this on it when i was a bairn... It's gorgeous. Both the lyrical musings and the sweetness of the delivery 🤩

@debs 1d

Holy star pants! If this isn’t the very definition of crisp, clear perfection, I don’t know what is!

@coolparadisoMod 1d

Already commented what fine lyric this is! Carly is a perfect one to deliver it! @stephenwordsmith she always amazes by the speed in which she delivers a so seemingly easy beautiful performance

@stephenwordsmith 1d

I'm amazed you put this together so quickly
The delivery tone (and pacing) is perfect - it's a wry, lamenting and educational song all at once, and your voice doesn't prejudice any mood over the other
The synths are great, adding a layer of interest and capping off the very ambivalent song with a positive note
You manage the bridge well, with the melodic vocal suiting the more broadly poetic words within
I really shouldn't have started the third verse the same as the first two; the Anaphora works once and once only.

@troubadette 1d

This is a GORGEOUS take on this lyric! Beautifully done!

@beacon 1d

This a combination of sweet presentation and biting sarcasm (the best kind). Great collab here.

@andygetch 1d

I love the stark not-happy-not-sad delivery on this awesome lyric.

@tcelliott 1d

What a great arrangement. The melody (and especially the phrasing) is nearly perfect. The delivery is crazy good as well. And I couldn't help but notice the wonderfully wrought lyric. I think I'm gonna start calling people of a certain profession starfish from now on.

@markfulwider 1d

This is beautifully executed! A simply lovely voice and delivered with sincerity and originality! Truly wonderful! Thank you! @stephenwordsmith Very creative lyrics my friend!

@eli666 1d

Great! Those synths fit so nicely and give a little boost to song. Good work.

@namjunerobot 1d

I like this, I wish I was a starfish now.

@mckillop 1d

Hello Carley: This is terrific! The meter and rhythm really drew me in, and it is a melody that is going to stick with me for quite a while. The lyric is a wonderful analysis and analogy of a starfish, its structure and its life, and clever social commentary to boot! Your vocal is very nicely done. Nice work!